Author Topic: The New Haven Chronicles - The Story  (Read 26212 times)

Offline Jimi James

  • So Say We All
  • Administrator
  • Distinguished Member
  • Posts: 9,322
  • Abandon Ship
    • View Profile
    • The New Haven Chronicles
Re: The New Haven Chronicles - The Story
« Reply #25 on: May 10, 2010, 02:35:04 PM »
I'm writing little snippets of dialog from various characters that will give you some insight into various aspects of their personality as well as what they're doing in the New Haven universe....in the form of a status update to the New Haven Profile Page.  It's interesting in that Facebook as a 420 character limit, so I have to choose very carefully what I want each character to say....note, these are more narrative in nature and not like a character created page, being updated every time they do something.

Here's the first one:
Quote
"Can you believe I volunteered for this; three times no less. I've got to be out of my fucking mind." Lance Corporal Valeen Farris, United Nations Marine Coprs. 3rd Platoon, 2nd Advanced Reconnaissance Operations Specialist Company, First Marine Division

I'll try to do a couple every day and once I get further into it, I'll drop the full rank and position description.
https://www.patreon.com/JonMichaelMay
Help me make art, by joining me on Patreon. Various subscriptions tiers are in place, allowing you to support my addictive art habit for as little as $1 a month.

Offline Jimi James

  • So Say We All
  • Administrator
  • Distinguished Member
  • Posts: 9,322
  • Abandon Ship
    • View Profile
    • The New Haven Chronicles
Re: The New Haven Chronicles - The Story
« Reply #26 on: May 10, 2010, 08:49:19 PM »
“I have four launch control specialists with itchy trigger fingers just waiting to show the Pax thirty-two reasons why they're wrong.” Captain Alexander Khasinua Commanding Officer; RFS Komi
« Last Edit: May 11, 2010, 08:18:27 AM by Jimi James »
https://www.patreon.com/JonMichaelMay
Help me make art, by joining me on Patreon. Various subscriptions tiers are in place, allowing you to support my addictive art habit for as little as $1 a month.

Offline Juvat

  • Prolific Member
  • Posts: 520
  • USAF Weapons Instructor
    • View Profile
Re: The New Haven Chronicles - The Story
« Reply #27 on: May 11, 2010, 06:51:54 AM »
Grammar: They're, not their. :P J/K

I'm liking these quotes.  Gives a great sense of "realism".
"In God We Trust"

Offline TNC

  • Board Legend
  • Posts: 10,651
  • Stuck in the middle of nowhere...
    • View Profile
Re: The New Haven Chronicles - The Story
« Reply #28 on: May 11, 2010, 09:25:09 AM »
The quotes are a nice touch.

About the timeline, your 2055 entry on hydrogen fuel cells gives me a few ideas/comments.


Fuel cells
Did they first become widely available in 2055 or some time earlier?  I don't know how detailed you want to get with the timeline (or all the technical stuff about fuel cells and hydrogen storage I'm about to mention) but maybe you could add an entry a year or so before 2055 mentioning that the hydrogen storage problem has been solved making hydrogen fuel cells more practical for vehicles and such.  Also currently hydrogen is industrially produced by a process called steam methane reforming.  I don't know if you want your universe to be "carbon neutral" but you may consider water electrolysis for hydrogen generation (I can give more info related to that if you want).

Another link relating to hydrogen storage: http://www.fsec.ucf.edu/en/consumer/hydrogen/basics/storage.htm

Alternate energy sources
You mention an energy crisis leading to the development of viable fusion reactors.  I think it would be a good idea to mention other alternate energy sources such as solar or wind energy. (Are they in use?  Why was fusion researched more than solar, etc.? (if that is the case) Etc.)
“Battle is not a simulation. It’s blood and screams and funerals.” – Capt. Georgiou – Star Trek: Discovery – “The Vulcan Hello”

Offline Jimi James

  • So Say We All
  • Administrator
  • Distinguished Member
  • Posts: 9,322
  • Abandon Ship
    • View Profile
    • The New Haven Chronicles
Re: The New Haven Chronicles - The Story
« Reply #29 on: May 11, 2010, 11:33:08 AM »
Thanks for the comments and info.

The fuel cells were available prior to 2055, but not economically feasible on the level to be competitive with oil until 2055.  I'll mention the hydrogen storage problem a few years earlier, but I think that's about as technical as I want to get.  At least for now.

Alternative sources of energy production were/are available in concert with the development of fusion technology, but few if any of them could match the level of power production that fusion offered.  I likely need to make a few additions to help clarify things and better define the rise of Fusion Technology and how it effects the energy crisis.

Today's quote:

Quote
“There are six of us in the entire Army.  How they expect us to train anyone for a HALA Jump is beyond me.” – Captain William Jefferson; United Nations Army Rangers Jump School Instructor.


A HALA jump is a High Altitude, Low Atmosphere insertion into a planetary body or satellite with a thin atmosphere....a prime example would be the insertion of soldiers and equipment onto Mars from orbit.  Specialized equipment to slow a persons descnet, beyond a standard high drag parachute is required for the jump.
https://www.patreon.com/JonMichaelMay
Help me make art, by joining me on Patreon. Various subscriptions tiers are in place, allowing you to support my addictive art habit for as little as $1 a month.

Offline TNC

  • Board Legend
  • Posts: 10,651
  • Stuck in the middle of nowhere...
    • View Profile
Re: The New Haven Chronicles - The Story
« Reply #30 on: May 11, 2010, 02:12:31 PM »
Thanks for the comments and info.

The fuel cells were available prior to 2055, but not economically feasible on the level to be competitive with oil until 2055.  I'll mention the hydrogen storage problem a few years earlier, but I think that's about as technical as I want to get.  At least for now.

That should work.  If you ever feel the need to get more technical about hydrogen storage I can provide some help with it (my research in grad school was related, so I've read a lot of research papers on the subject).
“Battle is not a simulation. It’s blood and screams and funerals.” – Capt. Georgiou – Star Trek: Discovery – “The Vulcan Hello”

Offline Jimi James

  • So Say We All
  • Administrator
  • Distinguished Member
  • Posts: 9,322
  • Abandon Ship
    • View Profile
    • The New Haven Chronicles
Re: The New Haven Chronicles - The Story
« Reply #31 on: May 11, 2010, 06:04:33 PM »
Thanks man.  I'll keep that in mind.

One more today:
Quote
“We haven't been from Earth, for a long time.  This new generation, all born on Mars...we're going to break all their little ships and burn that anchorage to the ground.  And when we finally set foot on Earth, it's gonna be so much worse.  We don't even want the planet.  It's too damn green.  Me, I like a little red in my lungs.”  -  Team Leader Ayame, 7th Jumper Unit
https://www.patreon.com/JonMichaelMay
Help me make art, by joining me on Patreon. Various subscriptions tiers are in place, allowing you to support my addictive art habit for as little as $1 a month.

Offline Jimi James

  • So Say We All
  • Administrator
  • Distinguished Member
  • Posts: 9,322
  • Abandon Ship
    • View Profile
    • The New Haven Chronicles
Re: The New Haven Chronicles - The Story
« Reply #32 on: May 12, 2010, 05:12:39 PM »
Quote
“We're losing this war in days and weeks.  A month if we're particularly clever, or the Pax are deliberately foolish; which I know for certain they're not.  They've been out here a long time, longer then any of us and experience counts for a lot.  Now it may count for everything.” – Colonel Prentice Brymmer, United Nations Marine Corps, Executive Officer: UNV Ticonderoga
https://www.patreon.com/JonMichaelMay
Help me make art, by joining me on Patreon. Various subscriptions tiers are in place, allowing you to support my addictive art habit for as little as $1 a month.

Offline Jimi James

  • So Say We All
  • Administrator
  • Distinguished Member
  • Posts: 9,322
  • Abandon Ship
    • View Profile
    • The New Haven Chronicles
Re: The New Haven Chronicles - The Story
« Reply #33 on: May 13, 2010, 03:48:04 PM »
Quote
“Everyone looks at me like he's taking advantage of me, but I see it the other way around.  I'm off Mars, out from under the dome, and I never run out of meds.  That's a fair degree more certainty then the rest of my family can attest to.”  – Gracie (In regards to life aboard the Humanitas and living with Jormun Arakel)
https://www.patreon.com/JonMichaelMay
Help me make art, by joining me on Patreon. Various subscriptions tiers are in place, allowing you to support my addictive art habit for as little as $1 a month.

Offline Jimi James

  • So Say We All
  • Administrator
  • Distinguished Member
  • Posts: 9,322
  • Abandon Ship
    • View Profile
    • The New Haven Chronicles
Re: The New Haven Chronicles - The Story
« Reply #34 on: May 15, 2010, 11:00:43 AM »
Two today, since I missed one yesterday.

Quote
“Against my better judgment, I volunteered for service aboard the Ticonderoga as a favor to a friend; thinking the experience would flatter my record.  When the conflict began some months later, my duty became something more then just the job I had taken on; it became the lives of those I was responsible for.  I could not leave them.” – Major Maria Serova:  United Nations Marie Corps; CDC Deck Officer UNV Ticonderoga

Quote
“This could have been avoided.” – Fleet Admiral Jormun Arakel; Director of Fleet Operations

The next section of the timeline is taking a bit longer. It's getting to the point now where the Pax are really beginning to build up there stature as a major player...and needless to say there is a lot to cover. 
« Last Edit: May 15, 2010, 02:48:30 PM by Jimi James »
https://www.patreon.com/JonMichaelMay
Help me make art, by joining me on Patreon. Various subscriptions tiers are in place, allowing you to support my addictive art habit for as little as $1 a month.

Offline Jimi James

  • So Say We All
  • Administrator
  • Distinguished Member
  • Posts: 9,322
  • Abandon Ship
    • View Profile
    • The New Haven Chronicles
Re: The New Haven Chronicles - The Story
« Reply #35 on: May 17, 2010, 02:32:06 PM »
Quote
“Two paths diverged in the woods, I took the one likely to get us all fucked.” Lance Corporal Valeen Farris
https://www.patreon.com/JonMichaelMay
Help me make art, by joining me on Patreon. Various subscriptions tiers are in place, allowing you to support my addictive art habit for as little as $1 a month.

Offline TNC

  • Board Legend
  • Posts: 10,651
  • Stuck in the middle of nowhere...
    • View Profile
Re: The New Haven Chronicles - The Story
« Reply #36 on: May 18, 2010, 06:54:48 PM »
Heh, I like that one.  ;D
“Battle is not a simulation. It’s blood and screams and funerals.” – Capt. Georgiou – Star Trek: Discovery – “The Vulcan Hello”

Offline Jimi James

  • So Say We All
  • Administrator
  • Distinguished Member
  • Posts: 9,322
  • Abandon Ship
    • View Profile
    • The New Haven Chronicles
Re: The New Haven Chronicles - The Story
« Reply #37 on: May 18, 2010, 08:28:49 PM »
Thanks.

Quote
“I believe in what we're doing, though I wish is wasn't necessary.  I miss being home, seeing my wives, hearing my children laugh.”  – Captain Niko Saculla commanding Officer; Humanitas
https://www.patreon.com/JonMichaelMay
Help me make art, by joining me on Patreon. Various subscriptions tiers are in place, allowing you to support my addictive art habit for as little as $1 a month.

Offline Jimi James

  • So Say We All
  • Administrator
  • Distinguished Member
  • Posts: 9,322
  • Abandon Ship
    • View Profile
    • The New Haven Chronicles
Re: The New Haven Chronicles - The Story
« Reply #38 on: May 22, 2010, 03:44:34 PM »
Quote
“My oath, is to you and him and her.  If that means I have to turn my back on a Squatter to keep you from bleeding out, then so be it.  No where does it say I have to patch them up to fight another day.”  Lieutenant James Underlay, Navy Corpsmen
« Last Edit: June 03, 2010, 03:32:58 PM by Jimi James »
https://www.patreon.com/JonMichaelMay
Help me make art, by joining me on Patreon. Various subscriptions tiers are in place, allowing you to support my addictive art habit for as little as $1 a month.

Offline Jimi James

  • So Say We All
  • Administrator
  • Distinguished Member
  • Posts: 9,322
  • Abandon Ship
    • View Profile
    • The New Haven Chronicles
Re: The New Haven Chronicles - The Story
« Reply #39 on: May 24, 2010, 10:20:06 AM »
Quote
"A lot of people lost their entire family on Luna, myself included.  I suppose it's easy to hate them for that...easy to blame someone I've never even laid eyes on.  Maybe a better man would find some way to look past it, but what we're doing doesn't make us any better.  It doesn't even make us right.  It just decides who's left. ”  – Captain Neville Freeman, Bridge Watch Officer; UNV Ticonderoga
https://www.patreon.com/JonMichaelMay
Help me make art, by joining me on Patreon. Various subscriptions tiers are in place, allowing you to support my addictive art habit for as little as $1 a month.

Offline Jimi James

  • So Say We All
  • Administrator
  • Distinguished Member
  • Posts: 9,322
  • Abandon Ship
    • View Profile
    • The New Haven Chronicles
Re: The New Haven Chronicles - The Story
« Reply #40 on: May 30, 2010, 05:21:05 AM »
I had some serious distractions last week, but hopefully this week will be a bit more steady.

Quote
“I really do hate space.  It's soulless and vacant of everything that makes us what we are.  There's no life out here and we have no business trying to prove otherwise.” Jormun Arakel

https://www.patreon.com/JonMichaelMay
Help me make art, by joining me on Patreon. Various subscriptions tiers are in place, allowing you to support my addictive art habit for as little as $1 a month.

Offline Jimi James

  • So Say We All
  • Administrator
  • Distinguished Member
  • Posts: 9,322
  • Abandon Ship
    • View Profile
    • The New Haven Chronicles
Re: The New Haven Chronicles - The Story
« Reply #41 on: June 02, 2010, 06:36:44 AM »
Quote
“They let me sleep in this morning; those damn fools.  By the time I was up and had any idea what was going on, we'd already lost half the company.  That's what it's like.  We never lose one or two.  It's always heavy.”  – Colonel Nathaniel Algren; Commanding Officer of Coalition Forces occupying New Haven Island
« Last Edit: June 03, 2010, 06:11:30 AM by Jimi James »
https://www.patreon.com/JonMichaelMay
Help me make art, by joining me on Patreon. Various subscriptions tiers are in place, allowing you to support my addictive art habit for as little as $1 a month.

Offline The Unbound

  • Active Member
  • Posts: 303
    • View Profile
Re: The New Haven Chronicles - The Story
« Reply #42 on: June 03, 2010, 04:02:40 AM »
I realize it's been a while since you discussed this, but I only just noticed this thread, and I'd like to raise a technical point about hydrogen fuel cells: They only work as a power source if you have a source of pure hydrogen (molecular or atomic) available, which, on the surface of the Earth, you don't. The nearest source of hydrogen, I believe, is either Jupiter's atmosphere, where it's - to put it mildly - difficult to extract (or, I suppose, the Sun, but frankly, if your idea of solar power is siphoning hydrogen from it and stuffing it in a fuel cell, you're being stupid). If you don't have that, you need to extract hydrogen from some chemical compound, which, in principle, requires the same amount of energy to do, as you get out of the hydrogen in the fuel cell. Hydrogen and fuel cells work well as a form of energy storage, mainly because they're less bulky and more scalable than batteries, and have the advantage of being refueled rather than recharged. Of course, you could put pretty much anything that can oxidize - burn, that is - in a fuel cell, and get a good bump in efficiency over the heat engine methods (that is, burning) we use today. Trouble with that is that fuel cells are still fiddly, expensive and difficult to make.

Now that that's over, I like the format with the quotes. Quite a bit. Only trouble is, right now, with a lot of these characters, the quote is all the information I have about them, so it comes across as very random and disconnected. It's not really a problem, and I think it's a great way of introducing a character before they show up in a story. It's just that until they show up in a story, well, I feel like I'm watching a play (or film, or TV show for that matter) that consists of random people walking on to the stage (screen), saying a line, and then walking off again. It's not that I don't like it, it's just that until some actual storytelling substance shows up, it's like being fed only garnish.

OK, I'll stop spamming metaphors now.
Steady on.

Offline Jimi James

  • So Say We All
  • Administrator
  • Distinguished Member
  • Posts: 9,322
  • Abandon Ship
    • View Profile
    • The New Haven Chronicles
Re: The New Haven Chronicles - The Story
« Reply #43 on: June 04, 2010, 08:07:12 PM »
I realize that for some, the exact technical specifications of various technologies may be a deal breaker, but for me, everything you just said is way more technical thought then I care to put into it; at least for this one small piece of tech.  So that being said, we can call them fuel cells (generically) and worry what's inside them making them tick if and when the story calls for it.

As for the quotes, right now they are somewhat disconnected and you've really no way to gauge the relevance of what's being said or importance of who is speaking.  In a way that's sort of the point, in that I can sort of tease certain things to peak your interest and perhaps get you asking questions or posting feedback.  However the ultimate payoff will be once the story is finally delivered, when it will be possible to look back at these and hopefully gain a better insight into what the characters were trying to say. 

In many cases, the characters are speaking about things that are significant to some point of the story or their personal development, to the point that when the larger picture is revealed, you should realize that you already know more about them then you might have previously
https://www.patreon.com/JonMichaelMay
Help me make art, by joining me on Patreon. Various subscriptions tiers are in place, allowing you to support my addictive art habit for as little as $1 a month.

Offline Jimi James

  • So Say We All
  • Administrator
  • Distinguished Member
  • Posts: 9,322
  • Abandon Ship
    • View Profile
    • The New Haven Chronicles
Re: The New Haven Chronicles - The Story
« Reply #44 on: June 05, 2010, 09:45:02 AM »
Quote
“These people, I can't know why they're here or what they've left back in the world, because as soon as I start to give a damn, I'll loose my objectivity.  It's something they tell every ARO in school as part of the whole promotion from within.  Any of us have to be prepared to step up and lead what's left into the fight.  It sounds all kinds of heroic in theory and when they lay it all out, it's all  ideas and hypothetical situations."

"But Kowalski has grandchildren.  Morgan is a mother and Cameron.... hell I suppose everyone has someone that cares about them.  They're my team and I'm their squad leader.  They would die for me, sure as hell as they've already killed for me.  And I for them just the same.  What am I supposed to do with them now, hold their hands every time something shoots back at us.  Way things are going, that adds up to a lot of holding."

"I don't want to fail them and get any of them killed for nothing.  But they're here for a job and a dangerous one at that.  No one volunteered for this thinking it was going to be a cake walk.  We all expected to fight, knowing that everyday we step off, might be the last.  So maybe it's beyond my control, or maybe that's just an excuse.  Either way, it seems like a shit deal.”
Sergeant Valeen Farris, Personal Log Entry, New Haven Island, June 2165
https://www.patreon.com/JonMichaelMay
Help me make art, by joining me on Patreon. Various subscriptions tiers are in place, allowing you to support my addictive art habit for as little as $1 a month.

Offline The Unbound

  • Active Member
  • Posts: 303
    • View Profile
Re: The New Haven Chronicles - The Story
« Reply #45 on: June 06, 2010, 05:26:26 AM »
I realize that for some, the exact technical specifications of various technologies may be a deal breaker, but for me, everything you just said is way more technical thought then I care to put into it; at least for this one small piece of tech.  So that being said, we can call them fuel cells (generically) and worry what's inside them making them tick if and when the story calls for it.

As for the quotes, right now they are somewhat disconnected and you've really no way to gauge the relevance of what's being said or importance of who is speaking.  In a way that's sort of the point, in that I can sort of tease certain things to peak your interest and perhaps get you asking questions or posting feedback.  However the ultimate payoff will be once the story is finally delivered, when it will be possible to look back at these and hopefully gain a better insight into what the characters were trying to say. 

In many cases, the characters are speaking about things that are significant to some point of the story or their personal development, to the point that when the larger picture is revealed, you should realize that you already know more about them then you might have previously

Fair enough. The technicalities did end up running away with me a bit, I have to say.
Steady on.

Offline Jimi James

  • So Say We All
  • Administrator
  • Distinguished Member
  • Posts: 9,322
  • Abandon Ship
    • View Profile
    • The New Haven Chronicles
Re: The New Haven Chronicles - The Story
« Reply #46 on: June 07, 2010, 04:20:24 PM »
No worries.  As I've said before, I'm just glad people are interested in this enough to respond at all.

Quote
“I've never seen Earth--never walked on dirt that wasn't red, breathed air that wasn't recycled through artificial scrubbers, or felt the suns actual warmth on my face.  It must be nice.  I hope to live long enough to see it one day.  It will be nice.”  –  Aurelia  Ramalho – Chief Financial Officer of the Pax Tecum Corporation
« Last Edit: June 10, 2010, 04:11:29 PM by Jimi James »
https://www.patreon.com/JonMichaelMay
Help me make art, by joining me on Patreon. Various subscriptions tiers are in place, allowing you to support my addictive art habit for as little as $1 a month.

Offline Jimi James

  • So Say We All
  • Administrator
  • Distinguished Member
  • Posts: 9,322
  • Abandon Ship
    • View Profile
    • The New Haven Chronicles
Re: The New Haven Chronicles - The Story
« Reply #47 on: June 10, 2010, 04:02:42 PM »
Quote
“One hundred-fifty years ago, the world stood at the precipice of total economic collapse. Countries fought over natural resources; this never changes.  Now, for the most part; Earth is united in common cause.  Never before have so many struggled to overcome a solitary threat. And we are that threat.  We, all but solved the power crisis that threatened to bring society to it's knees.  We, spurred the second great space age, ushering a new era of technological advancement and pushing human achievement to the very edge of what we could imagine.  And it will be out actions that cement humanities place among the stars, our victory and our rewards for a long fought battle.” –  Aurelia  Ramalho – Chief Financial Officer of the Pax Tecum Corporation (Declaration of Intent Address, to Corporate Share Holders; May 23, 2163)
« Last Edit: June 10, 2010, 04:11:08 PM by Jimi James »
https://www.patreon.com/JonMichaelMay
Help me make art, by joining me on Patreon. Various subscriptions tiers are in place, allowing you to support my addictive art habit for as little as $1 a month.

Offline Jimi James

  • So Say We All
  • Administrator
  • Distinguished Member
  • Posts: 9,322
  • Abandon Ship
    • View Profile
    • The New Haven Chronicles
Re: The New Haven Chronicles - The Story
« Reply #48 on: June 24, 2010, 12:45:39 AM »
Quote
“If the ship were going down, they'd likely save that damn cat before me.  Just as well I suppose.  Let Prentice be their friend.  All I need them to do is follow orders.”  Lieutenant General Oliver Laurie; Commanding Officer – UNV Ticonderoga
https://www.patreon.com/JonMichaelMay
Help me make art, by joining me on Patreon. Various subscriptions tiers are in place, allowing you to support my addictive art habit for as little as $1 a month.

Offline The Unbound

  • Active Member
  • Posts: 303
    • View Profile
Re: The New Haven Chronicles - The Story
« Reply #49 on: June 25, 2010, 05:38:16 AM »
I don't suppose Prentice is the name of the cat? Because it works surprisingly well if I imagine that that's the case.
Steady on.